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Oscar Wilde is kind of a hero for me. He is a successful writer who is also a homosexual. I hope one day to be a good enough writer to make a living at it.
Below is a trailer I made for a video that we shot in Oklahoma that was never finished called Broken Brotherhood.
Good evening, Sean!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your Introduction to your storybook! I especially enjoyed the lighthearted nature, and the jests constantly made.
There were quite a few phrases/words repeated a few times that never made sense to me. I don't know if this is because I have not read the story Na Paisti Na Cumhachta, but maybe you could give a further explanation in your first page. (Chisler and gasson are just a few examples of things I could never figure out :) )
I absolutely love the colors and fonts you used. Your navigation was very easy to use and get around with. I also enjoyed the little pictures you included in both posts. My favorite was the girl using her magical powers, where you stated that she was a girl you all had helped.
Overall, you did a wonderful job! I look forward to seeing the rest of your storybook.
Hey Sean,
ReplyDeleteI think we're actually in Lou Berney's screenwriting class together as well. Looking forward to more of your work in both classes.
I read through the introduction to your storybook, and I'm fascinated. You've successfully hooked me in, and I will definitely be returning to read your future posts to the storybook. But beware, this is a double edged sword. Part of the reason I'm so interested is that I have absolutely no idea what the future additions will be like.
I'm not sure if these are stories you'll be making up, or if there really is an ancient book called the Na Piasti Na Cumhachta. Part of this is that you've done a really good job suspending disbelief and keeping me absorbed in the story, but I also felt like I did not have a solid enough anchorage point to fully grasp what was going on.
Aside from that, I loved it. Your prose was colorful where it needed to be, and stark where it didn't. Charity is already developing a personality just from the introduction, and I feel like I'm going to love her as a narrator.
Your choice of a wisteria background was great, and almost added to the whole 'indigo children' theme, however, and maybe this is a problem on my end, but none of your links seemed to do anything when I clicked on them. Also, I could not find a link to your comment wall, and had to go through the class directory instead.
Technical issues aside, I can't wait to see where this storytelling project goes, and I'll also be looking forward to seeing your work in our screenwriting class!
Hey Sean,
ReplyDeleteI am really looking forward to seeing the storybook in completion. The introduction is very tantalizing for me. The color and images you chose are perfect for your theme. It is very ethereal.
The first story is neat.I am an Indigo. I haven't really heard anyone mention the topic for many years. I love to study magic and things of the metaphysical realm.
I like how you incorporated Laura and our class into the magical Charity's story that you are presenting. I often notice the similarities across all cultures,the mysticism. I like the vibes from the magic books you have used the images of like the book of Kells. A shaman I knew once told me that there is no such thing as bad knowledge, it's all what you do with the knowledge that makes it good or bad. The world of magic is a slippery slope that way.
I love your story. I have nothing to say that could help it be any more awesome than what you have done!
I think this is the first storybook I have seen so far and it looks great. I can see that you have put a lot of time into the design of your storybook. I think your introduction is a good was to start on your blog. It gives a lot of helpful information about your goals for your storybook. One thing that I appreciated in this storybook is the amount of visuals that you give from the start. In the introduction alone there are seven. I think pictures are a good way to add breaks in your introduction and connect ideas. My favorite part of your intro was the part where you explained why you like telling stories. I think it is important to have a passion for something in order to make it great. I think you did a great job overall and I enjoyed reading your story!
ReplyDeleteI am looking forward to reading more from your storybook
-Sara
Sean,
ReplyDeleteRight when I read your storybook title, I was intrigued. I did not know what the title meant so I was confused at first. I enjoyed looking at the pictures because they also elevated by intrigue on the content of your storybook. Your title page looks great and the font is appealing.
Your introduction was perfect because it explained exactly what you will be writing about in the weeks to come. You also clarified the meaning of your title, which I liked. The content of the introduction also brings a character, Charity Patch, to life. I enjoyed how you talked about our professor and how the Indian Epics class will be incorporated into your storybook. On a side note, the links in your introduction do not work. You might want to fix that!
Your first story was really good! I enjoyed reading the first installation. I really enjoyed how the story is about a little girl who can hear the talks of the spirits floating about. Great job!
Sean,
DeleteI was assigned to read your storybook again. I decided to leave my comments as a reply to my previous post. This week, I reread your introduction just to make sure I remember what your new story is going to be about. I just wanted to reiterate how much I love your topic. I was also reminded of how much I loved the character, Charity Patch.
Your new story, Grant and the Great Ruction, is in really good shape! I loved how you had Charity Patch describe the story a little before you actually started telling the story. So creative! I also liked how you had Charity Patch do the author's note! Really great job!!
Sean you took an interesting turn in your story. I enjoyed reading your story, and afterwards I read “The Glowworm and the Daw”. I was able to make the connections as said by Charity and I that instead of having an author’s note, you made the author’s note into a narration from Charity. You are a very creative individual and it shows here and also in your work in our other class!
ReplyDeleteJust some suggestions:
On the introduction page, you should see if you can enlarge the “Introduction: Charity’s Story Time”, or change the color. The same could be said for “A Note From the Production Team”, make the font smaller or change the color. “A Note From the Production Team” overshadows the introduction title and puts the focus elsewhere.
In your story the font that you used was great, but for me personally the italicized words are not distinguishable. It looks very close to the font that has not been italicized.
Other than that great job!
Hello again Sean!
ReplyDeleteI previously read your introduction, so this time I read first story. First off, I really enjoyed the format, color, and fonts you used in your storybook. It's bright, but not so much so that it is distracting or hurts your eyes.
The story was fantastic. My favorite part was when the ghost jumped up with the bones but the guy couldn't see the ghost behind him. I feel it was very well put together. I also like the descriptions in italics. It helped lead the story beforehand and concluded it very well at the end. It was a good idea that you put the comparison to the story similar to yours that you found.
I look forward to the next story in your storybook. I am curious to see how you are going to make a story to fit in well with the one you've already got.
Sean,
ReplyDeleteYou took a very unique approach to your storybook and I like it! I think you did a great job narrating the introduction with the author of the television show and him presenting the material on behalf of the production team. I actually find magic to be very interesting, so I this is right up my alley! You did a great job of explaining why the words “Na Paisti Na Cumhachta” translate to “The Color Children,” due to their aura color around them. In response to Galia and the Thief, I think that the plot is eerie, but you did a great job in making it that way! I like how you explained the energy transfer between life and death and that the energy moves on to their souls and leaves their bodies, creepy! I wonder, do these souls only come out at night or does Galia see them at all times of day? You did a great job with the structure of the story, it flows very nicely. Great work!
Hi Sean, I had fun reading your storybook! I love the mysterious stories that you are writing. You're doing a really good job at making them very vivid and easy to get lost in. I laughed when the Galia told the thief that there was treasure that was buried. It made me laugh a lot. I only have a few recommendations based on my experience reading your stories. I got a bit confused when the story ended and your author's note began. Perhaps you could make that a different color or font size or something to make it stand out and noticeable? Once I realized where it was, it was easy to figure it out, but it took me a few minutes. I think a slightly different shade of green for the tv narrator would be good, too. Those were my only recommendations, but it's really just based on my experience. Your story flows really well and I had quite some fun reading it. It made me think a bit of goosebumps. Good job and keep up the good work! I'll be checking back to see more for sure!
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ReplyDeleteI think the concept for your storybook is so clever and fun! The idea of presenting the stories for a young audience is a great way to approach their re-telling, and I think your writing so far is really effective in portraying the character and voice of Charity. It seems like so much thought and creativity has gone into just the structure of your storybook; it's like you've built a whole world for us to enter before we even get to the stories!
I love that you give us another frame to compare each of the Indian epics to. The stories that Charity tells, when compared to the original epics, helped me gain a deeper understanding of the original. Your writing is clear and easy to follow throughout, and I particularly liked your smooth incorporation of dialogue.
Great work! Looking forward to reading more!
Hi Sean!
ReplyDeleteI am so blown away by your writing! You are absolutely fantastic! Your Storybook is outstanding, and I am definitely impressed to say the least. I had so much fun reading your writing! I think your creativity is what really makes it so original and unique. I really like how you added a lot of dialogue to give more personality to each character. You not only had dialogue but you included some humor in there which encourages the reader to want to read even more! Your pictures were spot on an the format was easy to read, too. I can really tell you put a lot of your time and thought into making this a wonderful project. You definitely went the extra mile. I hope I get to read the last of your Portfolio! I really enjoyed it! Thank you for sharing, and I hope the end of your semester goes great!
Hello Sean,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your storybook. I found the introduction very interesting and I think everything was setup perfectly in the introduction. The best thing in your introduction was that it was clear what your storybook will be about. It made the audience/reader know what to expect later in the storybook. Which I found was a good idea for the audience and a nice way for the introduction. I enjoy reading things involving magic and stuff. So, I found your story was interesting. In addition to that, I liked it how you added our class into the magical charity’s story. I found that idea nice. Now next to the first story you added. I liked it how it was a story of a young girl and she likes to listen to spiritual things. Overall, it was great story and the introduction. I am looking forward to read more of your stories. Thanks for sharing.
This is the first time I visit your blog site and it is very interesting! I was mainly interested by the heading you used. I did not understand it and I knew I had to read more of your stories. I also like how you incorporated a yahoo into your blog to answer specific questions about your stories. That is the first time that I see someone use that. I was also interested by your background information. I really did not understand what you were speaking of until I read your stories! Thsat is a good thing because I have been reading too many stories about Rama or the Pandava brothers. I like how you are using an ancient book. And how cool is it to ork with someone else in creating this blog. This is so different from what I am use to . It is a great experience to read this!
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